Thursday, November 12, 2009

autumn haiku

today I feel dry
leaves drag across the asphalt
swept by wind brooms

or something like that

I'll keep tweaking it

4 comments:

  1. I've never seen a haiku with one stanza of three lines and two stanzas with one line each... I really like the conceptual development in the second stanza, and the resolution in the third.

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  2. :) I actually just meant the top bit to be the poem, but you're right about it as a whole . . . Hmmmm.

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  3. I was in a snarky mood that night...

    incidentally, though, the whole post taken as a poem does have something satisfying about it

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